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2. 05/03/11, 09:21 pm
Says: "Hi Alison,
I enjoyed reading your example of work! I think we can all remember when we had to teach our first lesson. While reading this, I felt like I understood how much work you put into it.
I almost wonder if this example of work could actually be 2 examples--the planning phase and then the implementation. I wanted to learn more about the process of collaboration you used with the cooperating teacher during planning. Specific examples of what you learned while actually teaching the lesson may allow you to show your core capacities more as well. I felt that adjusting your lesson plan for the next class based on your first experience showed how you are able to adapt to changes.
In the impact section, you mention relating real-life experiences to your students, and I wanted to learn more about that.
Hope this is helpful and thanks!
-Nina"
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1. 02/13/11, 03:55 pm
Says: "Alison,
First, thank you for your requests for feedback. It’s helpful to know what’s on your mind and where you’re looking for support/a reader’s perspective.
When I start reading your description, I feel like the description begins in sentence two. Maybe you want to foreground that is was your first whole class lesson, perhaps a little sentence combining would help with clarity and conciseness (“My first whole class lesson took place in an art class…”. I like that the goal of the lesson is present as well as the connection to the fashion or construction applications so they’re not just doing this for activity sake but there’s potential application in the world. There are a few wording issues that could be clarified, “enable their ability”—do you mean develop their ability, I’m thinking that the lesson was offered b/c their did not yet have abilities on their own, right? Secondly, what do you mean by “lesson unit”.
In response to your second question about overlap—I wonder about the sections you’re feeling are most productive for you. I feel like your TASKS ACCOMPLISHED builds nicely on your description. When I read the TASKS section I start to see what you did. There do seem to be some repetition. As I read, I see that you learned something about: “behind the scenes planning” that goes into high-quality series of lessons and learning, the value of collaboration in planning, pacing, the power and potential from observation, and the value of early active engagement in teaching/learning. Before I comment on wording/wordsmithing, I’d encourage you take some time to think about the organization of EoW that work best for you so that your postings are parallel. It may be helpful for you to collapse 2 of the sections together and play with the order.
One thought with IMPORTANCE—you mention a lot of the value you placed on the lesson. I’m curious if your co-teacher, cooperating teacher, students, faculty member etc offered any insight into your role/accomplishments/learning that might contribute to the importance of this experience.
Let me know when you’re ready for another read! I also look forward to reading something about working with your first grade readers!
Katie
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